#FirstLineFriday (and my world of run-on sentences)

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Last week, my friend Rami @Rami Ungar the Writer prompted me to try this weekly feature called #FirstLineFriday and here I am again. It was fun to take a look at some old stuff I had written, so, here we go again! (If you’ve missed the first post, click here)

The Rules:

  1. You create a blog post on your own blog entitled “#FirstLineFriday”, hashtag and all.
  2. You explain the rules.
  3. You post the first one or two lines of a potential story, a WIP, or a completed or published story.
  4. You ask your readers for feedback and encourage them to try and do #FirstLineFriday.

As I mentioned above, I used an old story last week and this time it is no different. It’s part of a short story about loss that I meant to develop into something more at one point or another. It features a very prominent issue that I don’t just see in my old work, but also in my writing now: run-on-sentences (and probably also punctuation).

I knocked, once, twice, luckily no one answered so I took out the key Nate once gave me and opened the door myself. The way up to his room was easy for I had been there almost every day the past months but now, entering it without him was surreal.

So, what do you think? Would you want to continue reading a story that started like this? (If you really are, click here) Let’s discuss in the comments!

This week I tag:

14 thoughts on “#FirstLineFriday (and my world of run-on sentences)

  1. I actually enjoy trying to see how much I can cram into a single sentence before it bursts. Run-ons or not, you’ve got me wondering what the third sentence is so you have my attention.

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